Friends! Romans! Miscellaneous! Lend me your eyes! And, well, fingers.
Having now submitted four reviews, I thought the time might be right to create a thread where you can critically tear them a new one. Any and all feedback will be read, appreciated, and taken on board, even if it takes a few tearful hours or sleepless nights to accept them.
I'm also open to suggestions for future reviews, based on what I've finished playing recently (this will be edited):
Donkey Kong Country Returns (Wii)
Fire Emblem: Radiant Dawn (Wii)
Batman: Arkham Asylum (PS3)
New Super Mario Bros (3DS)
The Legend of Zelda: Ocarina of Time (3DS)
Cheers, and thanks for stopping by!
Thread Recap (last 10 posts from newest to oldest)
Great to receive feedback as always. Everything's taken on board even if I don't respond - made a special effort in the last two reviews, for instance, to insert more commas.
Sep 25, 13 at 2:33am
just read your Journey review and I got a few things I need to point out.
‘Artistic video games’ is quickly becoming my favourite genre
I don't really care for the wording here. it's a bit too Engrish for my liking. something like "I'm really starting to love these more artistic video games" seems to be a better fit.
but it’s watered down all the individual genres to the point we’re they’re all starting to resemble each other.
and again dude, heaps of missing commas! it's a really good review otherwise.
Sep 07, 13 at 5:24am
Haha, cheers for the read Watain - I'm a bit relieved tbh, when I saw you'd posted in here I naturally assumed you were going to tear my review apart! At least missing commas are an easy fix.
I think the problem that I have is that I get too concerned about my point being watered down in the course of my sentence due to detail and accordingly I most frequently leave the actual point that I'm making right until the end of the sentence.
...Rather like that. I'll be sure to keep it in mind for next time, thank you!
Sep 06, 13 at 7:26am
there are so many missing commas in that Super Mario World review. I'd hate to imagine reading that out loud in its current form in front of people without pauses, especially where there ought to be pauses.