quote Kafani

shut the fvck up and show some respect.

*Tai*

Bar 1: 4/10
Bar 2: 3/10
Bar 1, I thought the dehydrated people simile was kind of clever. Good to see you taking the time to develop your wordplay a bit. The grammar was off though (a dehydrated people?). And the personal wasn't original. Cats have been dissin' Descy's tendency to force multis to death. If you use that idea, you really need to come up with an off the wall bar that makes it seem original. Bar 2, I liked the first line but the second line had no punch to it.

Bar 3: 3/10
Bar 4: 2/10
Bars 3 & 4, I had a problem with your delivery. You come across like a stand-up comedian who really shouldn't quit his day job, picking on the only two people who came to his show. Let me explain. The ideas weren't bad but you really need to play with the bars so they it don't come across like cheap one-liners. The Q and A format just didn't work. At least the set-up to bar 3 led to some sort of punchline. Bar 4's first line looked like it was going to be a set up to a rankings diss, but then you pull a joke about his appearance (and not a particularly good one) out of your ass.

Bar 5: 6/10
Bar 6: 4/10
I liked where you were going in bar 5, but still the bar could have been better. Putas did something similar in his battle with Descy, but you use actual examples of things Descy's written, which Putas didn't do. You get originality points for that. However, your last example "one time" isn't a forced multi. But I must admit the punchline was pretty funny, yet still not perfect. I would have done something like this...

"Glover crops mice," "I'll dead you queef," "My lore forces hoax," and "Jaw absorb a surge?"
Nice piss-poor verse. Just say, "God damn I SUCK!" and end the agony in four short words

Bar 6 lackluster "violent" first line. Second line, somewhere in there was an attempt at a personal, but why the fvck would Boston scare him? That needed reworking.

Bar 7: 3/10
Bar 8: 2/10
Bar 7 was too simplistic a personal, no cleverness and way to basic rhymes. Bar 8... Are you familiar with the phrase, "Don't count your chicks before they hatch?

Bar 9: 2/10
Bar 10: 4/10
Bar 9, some links would have been nice to back this claim up. Plus the second line you imply that it's not the first time he's bitten someone named Pete, but you aren't specific as to who. Are you saying he bit Bosoxpete? Or that he bit TheSaurus more than once? Even if either were true... there is so much more you could with that line with just a little more thought you could have given it a "history re-PETEing itself" angle. Bar 10 was ok, but the rhyme was pretty bad. Plus it's "Krueger" not "Cruger."

Total: 33/100 33%

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*Descy*

Bar 1: 6/10
Bar 2: 5/10
Bar 1, I am so close to calling you on feeding/flipping as you reference his verse and the fact that he uses "Dehydrated" in his first bar and you use "Dehumidifier" in yours. Very similar concept. I think you know full well what you were doing. That being said, I hope he sees your bar and sees how he could have made his better. The first line could have been reworked, I think, because it comes across as if you don't ordinarily think of his material as "stupid and tired" and you're just hoping he will this time, as if you didn't stand a chance against him otherwise. So flawed set-up, but good punch. Bar 2, good flow, interesting ideas. I didn't feel it esspecially hard hitting as a punch, mainly because I'm not sure if the Arabian sultan thing was something he actually role-plays or was just an off the dome thing because he likes RPGs. Also, I never really thought of Alladdin's castle in quite that way before.

Bar 3: 7/10
Bar 4: 8/10
Bar 3... You watch way too much porn. Didn't you take that route with Fyre too? LOL! Still, you show that you can be direct and still show some creativity. Bar 4, loved the Transfomers 2 comparison in the first line. Nice personal in the second.

Bar 5: 3/10
Bar 6: 6/10
Bar 5, I thought the first bar was gonna set-up something nasty, but I was really dissappointed. A gameboy diss? Seriously, Desc? You do realize Neoseeker is a gaming site, correct? Bar 6 was an improvement but the "gay voice" needed a re-write and the "frolic's very compulsive" came off a bit forced. The second line was a haymaker, it just needed a better set-up.

Bar 7: 2/10
Bar 8: 5/10
Bar 7, really wasn't sure where you were going with this. Biting? Beards? Asians? What? Bar 8, good structure, kind of generic though. Could have been a lot stronger as a finisher.

Total: 42/80 52.5%

Favorite(s):

"My parry's elite. You can Slash and stab but your raps is passed prime, call em Transformers 2
And I'm the reason Raging's text took staging, left.. I've halved this mans former crew" ~Descy

Winner: Descy