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May 20, 12 at 9:43am ^Dragon Ball Juniors (Fan Made Story)
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[The episode begins with Goku jr and Vegeta jr staring at each other as Super Saiyans in the World Martial Arts Tournamet. Then they run towards each other and gets engaged in a combat. We then see Pan watching the battle with enthusiasm. We then sees Goku watching the battle from the gallery. Pan sees Goku.]
Pan: Grandpa Goku?
[Pan rushes to the place where she saw Goku, but finds no one. We then see Goku walking through the crowds. Goku flies up with the powerpole in his hand and Nimbus picks him up and goes away. We then move on to the battle of Goku jr and Vegeta jr. Pan then comes back to her seat.]
Puck: Where did you go Pan?
Puck: Pan, where did you go?
Pan: What?... Me? I saw someone i used to know. There wasn't anybody. Looks like i'm seeing things.
Puck: Who was it?
Pan: Uh... You don't know him.
[They then watches the battle as Goku and Vegeta is fighting with all they've got. Goku then punches Vegeta in the stomach and grabs Vegeta's legs. Goku swings and throws Vegeta to the arena which causes the arena to break. Vegeta stands up. Goku then rushes towards Vegeta and tries to punch him, but Vegeta suddenly disappears and Goku's attack misses. Vegeta appears above Goku and hits him with Two-Hand Smash. Vegeta flies upwards and stares at the smoke. Suddenly Goku rushes towards Vegeta and hits him on his chin. Vegeta is then send upwards but stops himself. Goku again flies towards Vegeta and tries to hit him but Vegeta blocks the attack and they engages in a hand to hand combat. Some people cheers for them while the others watches it in amazement. We sees an explosion in the air. Somebody is hit with an energy blast and is crashing down to the ring. Vegeta is still floating in the air while Goku is trying to stand up.]
Goku: Hey,... This isn't fair. Nobody told me that we could use Energy blasts in tournament battles.
Vegeta:This is World Martial Arts Tournament. Remember...
Goku: Well in that case....... Take this.
Goku then launches a big energy blast at Vegeta, Vegeta tries to block it, but it explodes sending Vegeta back to the ring.]
Goku: Is that enough?
Vegeta:[Trying to stand up] I expected it from you, but didn't thought that you'd fire a blast that powerful. Well it's time to end it.
Goku: What do you mean?
Vegeta: Never thought i had to use this move in this tournament. [Prepares for Final Flash attack]
[We moves on to Pan and Puck]
Pan: What?.... It's.....
Puck: What is it Pan?
Pan: It's Final Flash....
Puck: What's that?
Pan: A powerful move which Grandpa Goku's friend Vegeta used to use...
Vegeta's mother: So you know my Great grandpa Vegeta???
[We move on to Vegeta and Goku]
Vegeta: This was a move which my Great great grandpa used to use. [Starts to gather power]Final Flash
Goku: Oh...... In that case, I'm also going to use a move which my Great great grandpa used to use.[Prepares for Kamehameha attack and starts to gather energy.]Ka..Me..Ha..Me..
Pan: I knew you'd use it Goku, do it for Grandpa Goku...
[Goku and Vegeta fires there special moves and they collides creating a big explosion. Nobody seems to have an upper hand. The crowd watches the battle in amazement.]
Pan:[In mind]Wow... Their power levels are equal...
[Goku and Vegeta then powers their moves to the best level and both the beams looks equally powered]
Kamehameha and Final Flash looks like they are equal. Who will win this tournament? Stay tuned...
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May 20, 12 at 11:12am ^re: Dragon Ball Juniors (Fan Made Story)
You should have PM'ed me this chapter first Lareon, so that I could have given to go ahead. Anyway, it looks like a half-decent fanfic so far, better than a lot I've seen coming by, so I give you the OK to go ahead with it.
May 21, 12 at 4:55am ^re: Dragon Ball Juniors (Fan Made Story)
Sorry G_O_G_E_T_A. And thanks for the comment. I'll write the 2nd episode the next week, because i won't be opening my PC for a while.... Well thanks again...
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May 23, 12 at 12:04pm ^re: Dragon Ball Juniors (Fan Made Story)
my advice, use more descriptive writing to paint a clear picture. as is, it's hard to really picture their surroundings, or the atmosphere of what's happening.
May 24, 12 at 7:44am ^re: Dragon Ball Juniors (Fan Made Story)
I'm not really a writer and i am just learning to handle English. I'll try my best to do it
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May 24, 12 at 6:27pm ^re: Dragon Ball Juniors (Fan Made Story)
just learning to handle english? well so far so good. you already type english better than super vegetto! XD
Jun 08, 12 at 6:12pm ^re: Dragon Ball Juniors (Fan Made Story)
i'm sorry. something is wrong with my PC. and there is also some problems with my internet connection. i'll post the next episode as soon as possible.
Sep 24, 12 at 10:27am ^re: Dragon Ball Juniors (Fan Made Story)
Episode 2: Tournament Ends, Secret Revealed
[The two beams collide with great power. Everybody looks surprised. Pan, Puck and Vegeta's mother is watching the battle with enthusiasm. Either of them doesn't seem to have an upper hand.]
Pan: They are so strong, Nobody can beat them if they work together. Just like the old days
Vegeta's mother: I can't believe it, I didn't expect those to be so strong.
Pan: What less can you expect from the Great Great Grandsons of the greatest warriors in the world.
Vegeta's mother: Uh.....
Puck: Oh..... Pan, if this keeps up the stadium is gonna be destroyed.
Pan: Don't worry, they'll look into it. I think......
[Goku and Vegeta is giving all they've got. Both of them are being pulled back by the energy. Suddenly they boost their energy to the max and we see an enormous explosion which causes some weak people to fly away. The arena slowly starts to break up]
Vegeta's mother: Vegeta...........
[The smoke slowly lifts up. Goku and Vegeta are lying on the ground and there is no arena!!! It is completely destroyed.]
Vegeta's mother: Vegeta......
Announcer: What the stadium is destroyed? Folks the stadium is destroyed and bothe the competitors are lying down on the floor, which means that it is a draw. Nobody wins the tournament. ]
Goku: [slowly getting up]Huh..... Did.... i...... win?
Vegeta: [slowly getting up]No......I......did!
Announcer: Sorry folks, Niether of you have won because both of you were lying on the ground. And there is no arena. I'm sorry to tell you that it's a draw. But unfortunately it's a draw.
Goku: Oh man............
Vegeta: One day, one day i'll defeat you Goku. Untill then i'll be training. Training hard to defeat you.
Goku: We'll see about that. Next time we fight, you'll be the one to lose
Pan: [in mind] No wonder they're the grandsons of the Legendary Goku and Vegeta. I can't believe the Greatest warriors fought in front of me now. All these years peace was balanced. But.....But now i can feel an evil energy approaching Earth. I'm sure that they can beat it if they work together. They'll make a great team.
Vegeta's Mom: Is this true? Is he really the descendant of Goku?
Pan: Yes, he is the great great grandson of Goku, just like your son is the descendant of Vegeta.
Vegeta's Mom: What, you know my Grandpa Vegeta?
Pan: Of course kid. I am the only one left in the world who saw all the actions of the real full blooded saiyans.
Vegeta's Mom: So......(Suddenly Vegeta and Goku arrives there and interupts the conversation)
Vegeta: Mom....... I'm sorry. I couldn't win.
Vegeta's Mom: Don't worry Vegeta. It was a tie. Nobody won.
Vegeta: But....But mom......
Vegeta's Mom: (to Goku) You are a strong kid indeed. Both of you can be proud that you are saiyans.....
Goku: Thanks Ma'am.
Pan: Yes, Vegeta too is a real strong kid....... (to Vegeta's mother) So what was your name?
Vegeta's Mom: I'm Shella. And you should be Pan. Am i right?
Pan: Yes I am....... How did you know?
Shella: I have a picture of all the Z Fighters in my home. I saw you there.
Pan: Oh........ Is that so?
Shella: Yes. Pan, Can we meet again some time? I have some thing to talk to you.
Pan: Yes, I too have some thing to tell you.......
Goku: Can i come with you grandma?
Vegeta: Oh........ the baby can't leave his grandma.
Pan: No doubt he is the great great grandson of Vegeta.....
Goku: Vegeta, can we spar when they meet?
Vegeta: Yeah.... And that time i'm gonna beat you.
Goku: We'll se about that....I'll be the one who beats you.
Pan: Let's go Goku....... We'll have to practice.
Goku: What....... So soon?
Pan: Shella...... Vegeta, we'll see you soon.......
Shella: Okay Pan, bye
Goku: Bye Shella, Vegeta.......
[Goku,Pan and Puck walks away to the plane which is parked outside the stadium. Vegeta and Shella watches them as they fades. Then we see Goku,Pan and Puck entering the plane and the plane starts to fly]
Pan: I.....I saw him....
Puck: Yeah, I saw you running away from the stadium in the middle of the match. Where did you go?
Goku: What? You left the stadium when we were fighting? Whom did you see grandma?
Pan: Grandpa..... I saw Grandpa Goku.......
Goku: What??? You saw grandpa Goku? So he is still alive...........
Pan: What do you mean by "still alive"? Do you know some thing?
Goku: Yeah........ The time i first became a super saiyan......... I saw him......
Pan: You did? How?
Goku: I wanted to cure you grandma, so i got to grandpa goku's house and found the 4-star dragon ball. I tried
my best to summon the dragon. But i couldn't. Then grandpa goku appeared and told me that i need 7
dragonballs to summon the dragon......
Pan: And so you met him?
Goku: Yes..... And then he disappeared.
Puck: So you mean that the Legendary Goku is still alive???
Pan: There are chances for it! Yes, Grandpa Goku didn't die like the others did..... He left with Shenron to train
when i was your age...... And he never returned. Maybe he never died, maybe he is still alive. He might
have became immortal.
Goku: Wow........ So does that mean that i can see grandpa Goku again?
Pan: I guess so....... But i know one thing, that Earth would always be safe when Grandpa Goku is there to
Puck: I'm waiting to see the rematch between Goku and Vegeta.
Goku: Yeah....... Me too. I'll beat him for sure this time.........
We see the plane flying away to the clouds.......
What will happen in the next rematch between Goku and Vegeta? Stay tuned.
Sep 24, 12 at 10:29am ^re: Dragon Ball Juniors (Fan Made Story)
Sorry, this episode's not haveing much action........ But i'm working on a new saga........ There are many fights in it........... Okay
Sep 24, 12 at 9:28pm ^re: Dragon Ball Juniors (Fan Made Story)
This is pretty decent, and I'm liking it so far. Good work.
Sep 25, 12 at 5:00am ^re: Dragon Ball Juniors (Fan Made Story)
Thanks, the next one will be there soon......
Sep 25, 12 at 8:12am ^re: Dragon Ball Juniors (Fan Made Story)
Episode 3: A New Threat To Earth?
We see Goku training with Pan. And Puck is watching them standing near a tree.]
Goku is fighting with all he has got and Pan is fighting with the same spirit too. After a while Goku flies over to Puck and sits on the ground]
Goku: Grandma i'm tired....... Let's take a break....
Pan: What? Break? No warrior takes break while they are training. Now get up Goku
Goku: [Slowly getting up] Come on grandma...... Please let me have a break!
Puck: Yeah Pan... He looks really tired. Please give him a break.
Pan: If you say so, then let's take a break.
Goku: Yeah, alright.
Pan: But remember your battle against Vegeta is arriving... You should train hard to beat him. [in mind] I know that's not the reason why i make Goku to train this hard....... It's coming, It will be here in a couple of days. But i tell Goku the truth
Goku: I know grandma, i know. I will beat Vegeta the next time. For sure.
Puck: You should, I have nothing else to say.
Pan: I'll call Shella and inform her to come to the city park the day after tomorrow.
Goku: What? The day after tomorrow? Why so soon?
Pan: There are reasons for that GOku. But i can't tell you that now.
Puck: What do you mean by you can't tell us that now?
Goku: Yeah.... I'm not ready yet.
Pan: That's why i told you that you have train. Train hard!
Pan: [calls Shella on her phone. We can only hear Pan talking] Hello, is this Shella, I'm Pan
Goku Jr.'s Grandma................... Yeah, i'm fine, i ringed you so i could inform you something...................... We can meet the day after tomorrow at 10, do you agree?..................There's a reason, i'll tell you that day. And where is Vegeta?............ So he is training in the gravity chamber................ Shella make sure that Vegeta trains well for theat dat, Okay?............ Okay then we'll meet you at the City park. Bye.[She cuts the phone]
Goku: So Vegeta is training the Gravity chamber?
Pan: Yes, And that will make him real strong.....
Goku: No way....... I wont let him beat me. c'mon grandma let's train.
Puck: What? So soon? Weren't you tired?
Goku: Was i? I dont think so.......
Pan: That's the spirit GOku. Train hard.
[Goku and Pan starts to train again and this time Goku is giving all he've got with max power. Then we see Goku training in different periods of time. Atlast the day arrived. Goku and Pan heads for the Park and flies away. Puck is with them too. Pan is carrying him. They reaches the park. They finds no one there. They goes and sits on the bench]
Goku: They aren't here. It's already 10. Why didn't they reach here?
Pan: They'll be here. Don't worry. I can sense them coming [in mind]And......... I can also sense IT coming]
Goku: Yeah me too. Vegeta's gotten more stronger. And me too. This will be amazing.
Puck: Are you sure that you can beat Vegeta this time, Goku?
Goku: Yup, I'm sure
[Vegeta and Shella arrives and they walks upto Goku Pan and Puck]
Shella: Hai Pna, goku and puck..... How're you all?
Goku: We're fine Shella. What 'bout you guys?
Vegeta: Why do you want to know about us? Let's start the fight.
Pan: I'm sorry. We can't start the battle now!
Pan: First, I have to talk to Shella and then to all of you.
Goku: Why grandma?
Vegeta: So we came here to chat, not to fight?
Pan: Would you come with me Shella?
Shella: Of course....... You guys wait here.
Vegeta: But mom..........
[Pan and Shella walks away to a tree. We see Goku and Vegeta chatting]
Goku: Why did she do it? I don't uderstand.........
Vegeta: What secret do they have to tell right now?
Puck: Wait you guys, they'll come back right now.
Vegeta: I can't wait anymore. c'mon Goku, Let's fight.
Goku: But.......... But..........
[Pan and Shella comes back]
Pan: Wait you two...... We have to tell you something.
Goku: What is it grandma?
Vegeta: Were you talking about this right now?
Shella: Yes........... You know that the peace was balanced after the shadow dragons....... But
Vegeta: Shadow Dragons? Oh, yeah. The Shadow dragons which you told me about. Isn't it mom?
Pan: Yes........ But now evil is falling on the earth again..........
Goku: What do you mean grandma?
Pan: I mean that an evil energy is approaching earth..... A strong one.....
Shella: And that is why Pan forced you to train, to fight togetther against this monster.
Vegeta: What? Fight with him? Me? No way!
Goku: C'mon Vegeta.......... Let's fight together.
Pan: Fight together Vegeta, Just like your Great Great Grandfathers..... Defeat it!
Vegeta: No!!! I can defeat it by myself. I need no one's help.
Puck: But Vege..............
[Puck couldn't complete his words. It came. A huge spaceship.]
Vegeta: Now we're talking, So this is the monster......... I'll show you who the monster is.
Pan: Vegeta........ Understand me, you can't defeat it alone.
[Vegeta ignores her and walks forward. He suddenly stops seeing the entrance of the spaceship opening. A shadow figure appears at the entrance. Everybody awaitingly looks at it.][/color]
After a long period of interval an evil energy has reached the Earth. Who would be this new threat. What is his aim? Stay tuned to find out who this new threat is.........
Sep 27, 12 at 8:30am ^re: Dragon Ball Juniors (Fan Made Story)
This is great
Sep 28, 12 at 7:55am ^re: Dragon Ball Juniors (Fan Made Story)
Thanks......... Next will be there soon
Sep 30, 12 at 8:45am ^re: Dragon Ball Juniors (Fan Made Story)
Episode 4: An Old Enemy
[Vegeta stops seeing the dark figure which had appeared at the entrance]
Goku:[Fearfully]Is this the guy you've been talking about grandma?
Pan: I think so.........
Puck: I'm getting a nasty feeling about this.
Shella: Is he that strong? I don't feel much energy in him.
Vegeta: I can beat this guy by my two hands tied behind my back.
Pan: Don't be so sure Vegeta.......... A well trained warrior can always hide their energy.
Goku: Yeah...... So we shouldn't underestimate him.
Vegeta: No one can defeat me in this state of mine. Let him fight with his full potential. I'll take him on.
Goku: But Vegeta............
Vegeta: Shut up, you coward. [Facing the Space ship]Hey, come down here. I'll teach you a lesson or two.
[The dark figure steps his foot outside. We then see a strong wind blowing towards it. I suddenly starts to snow.]
Goku:[Shivering]What? This isn't the time of year to snow.
Pan: Its very unusual.
Puck: Oh man......... I hate winter.
Vegeta: Ahh........I'm starting to love this.
Shella: I think this has something to do with that guy..........
[The Dark figure Walks forward. Then he slowly lifts himself upto the air and slowly lands on the earth........ Showing himself!!! Its head is very long and extends to the back. Its tail is also very long and has sharp thorns on it. Its body is well built and its hand and legs are very strong and firm. And one of its speciality is that it has armour like body parts, a very hard substance. He then slowly walks towards Vegeta]
Vegeta: What do you want freak? Why did you come to earth?
Vegeta: What are you laughing at? This is your last laugh. Because your demise has been arrived.
Goku: So you are the one? Huh?
Pan: [In mind]Yes, he is the one alright. But what does he want? I've never seen a creature like this before in my life!
Puck: [[Runs and hides behind Pan]He looks so scary.
Shella: Are you the one causing the disturbance in the weather?
Vegeta: Don't just stand there. Speak up now! Who do you think you are?
Creature: Oh Vegeta........You're just stubborn as you were before.
Vegeta: [Surprisingly] How do you know my name is Vegeta?
Creature: [Facing Goku]Oh........ If it isn't my all time rival Bardock!
Goku: You talking to me? If you are, my name isn't Bardock. I'm Goku Jr.
Pan: [In mind]How does he know my great grandpa Bardock?
Creature: So you are saying that you aren't Bardock! But you almost have his same energy signature. Are you a Saiyan?
Vegeta: Hey, mind me over here too........
Creature: Vegeta..... Ahh........ The Saiyan who i've always hated. You've grown stronger Vegeta!
Vegeta: What are you talking about? I've never seen you before!
Creature: Don't tell me that you are also another person like him[Points his finger to Goku]
Vegeta: I'm not the Vegeta you're talking about. I'm Vegeta Jr.
Creature: So no one here knows who i am. Ha..ha...ha..ha
Goku: So, why did you come here?
Creature: For my revenge. To destroy my opponents. But it seems like they are no more. But........ I'll have my revenge on you two. You'll pay for your ancestors' deeds.
Goku: I'm the great great grandson of Goku, the most strongest warrior in this Universe. I'll never lose to a guy like you.
Vegeta: Me too..........
Creature: Don't make me laugh..... Are you saying that a puny saiyan was the most strongest warrior?
Pan: Of course. He 'is' the most strongest warrior! Before anything else tell us who you are!
Creature: I don't mind revealing myself to you, when you are about to die.
After that i'll destroy this puny planet.
Vegeta: Blah.....Blah.....Blah.... Stop your speech and start talking
Creature: I am Metice! The Son of King Cold. Now King Metice.....
[color=red]Is he really the Son of King Cold? Stay tuned to find out
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