hehe, yeah. He's not really a human-turned-fox, he's an evolved fox. So he's pretty much stuck that way. And, as is my wont, a journal entry shall be forthcoming at the end.

anyway. I suppose I will offer my services for the chapter you really want re-written. I'm enjoying the rest of it so far.

And yeah. I too enjoy the split characters. It's a whole lot easier to write. At least I think so.

I wanted to post something about Lizer. Murray, you posted that lizer and Qoyul met 50 years ago. Considering I can't imagine Lizer being fifty something, or most any of the characters for that matter, could reptile/human hybrids age at a quarter of the regular age rate?
Also, a definite aspect, after Lizer/Qoyul collapsed into a shapeless mass, Lizer is able to dis assimilate his molecules. He has limited capabilities. He can't phase through things, but things can phase through him. And he change his appearance, to an extent( growing a tail, extra arms, etc.) To compensate for that, Lizer's losing two swords and all guns, and he goes unconscious if he alters his body for too long.
Sorry to change my character again. I'm pretty sure I'm done. You guys probably hate me now. Sorry again.
Finally, If you don't hate me, can I do Lizer's background/

make it 50 of your planet's years which are actually closer to four months so that's 16.6 years since they were in school when they met they'd be around 10 Earth years, so 26 can be their final age give or take a year or two.

Yeah Lizer's your character and although we can change some background of eachother's characters (Foxy has all of Sheila's however I don't really mind, he's way better with her, I also explained Weldar's powers and, to my knowledge, he doesn't mind either) we are in control of our own characters almost entirely.

By the way in my upcoming plot, don't end it after Vaati's defeat, it's a two parter!

I forgot to mention, Lizer can't increase his mass, so he has to give something up to get something. Also Lizer's full name is Foryx Lizer Reptilia, using Lizer because Foryx is a human name.

Yeah, I'd say change the length of a year. That's what I did. and yeah,I kind of inadvertently 'stole' Sheila's character a while ago. But I don't really care about Foxy as a character all that much anymore. If you have any ideas you want to use with him, go nuts!

And we don't hate you Lizer, you delightful little scamp! At least I don't.

what about me?
i promise that i WILL start to post again in the NEMM starting this summer.
if i have some time off from my job.

Chapter 4: Friend or Foe, Zeldman

"That looks painful, you sure you’re alright?" Link asked Foxy who had a lump on the side of his head,
"Yeah, I’ve had worse, all I want to do is find a new home, my old world, well let’s just say a friend of mine got me in trouble!" Link laughed, he could hear Weldar struggling to hold Murray still but he continued suddenly something dark appeared before their eyes.
Slowly it took form, a swirling spiral of darkness that the group watched as something began to appear from it, out walked a person, around Adult Link’s size almost exactly minus the hat, his skin was of a darker tone and he seemed to have a dark aura that only Link could sense.

"COOL!" Murray yelled, "Did you just complete a dungeon? I like apple sauce with my caramels!" The person looked shocked, but upon noticing Link he smiled, Link didn’t know why but this smile made him feel uneasy but he ignored it.
"I’m Zeld, I, uh, I kind of got ...lost..." Zeld's voice was shaky and timid Link got the assumed that he must’ve imagined the foreboding feeling Zeld gave him.
"We’re looking for Hyrule, I’m Link by the way, these are Weldar, Foxy, Murray and Yellow, we’ll help you find your home if you want!" Link said smiling.
"That’d be nice, I don't which way it is..." Zeld admitted, Murray and Yellow pointed a combined total of eight limbs in different directions, before agreeing on a small root route to the left.

"So, you’re really following these two?" Zeld asked,
"Yeah," Weldar said "but so far they have only steered us wrong once but it could be a growing fad!" Zeld gave an uneasy smile as the group walked through the long root route, Link wondered what he was thinking.
I could kill him with one surprise slice but I’d never get out alive with those two there, and if I create a portal to warp them into the earth's core they'd be suspicious of why I didn’t use it earlier and help find their homes and the lava would come out if I kept it open too long, I’ll have to wait...

(part 5!)

Chapter 5: Majora's Return

The Happy Mask Salesman was returning home, he had the new mask in tow and was ready to continue his collection.
Suddenly a voice came from the mask into his head you've gone through a lot to get me haven't you?
"What? I thought the evil had gone from this mask!" He said out loud, scared, immortality is a great thing, I could give you that gift too, I could give you anything, what is it you desire?
He tried to stop himself but the mask was strong, "I... Want to have... All the m-m... masks!" He said failing to stop himself as you wish.

Majora flew into the air before its tentacles spread out the back shooting tiny balls of light everywhere, everything seemed silent for a while before suddenly thousands of masks flew at them, each smashing into him from all sides, his face contorted with pain, he tried to escape and push the masks away but they were tightening and fusing with his skin even the ones in his pack were crushing him.
"hmhmhmhmhm" Majora laughed aloud, "and now for the final mask!" Majora said before placing itself on the Mask Salesman’s face, the masks that had fused with his body all glowed and moved into the shape of a person, Majora sitting on the face...

(Chapter 6 is the one I don't like, it reveals characters abilities and weapons but it feels super-rushed!)

This message was edited by Murray3 on Apr 17 2008.

Yay, more movie!

Has Kivvi ever protected Foxy from certain demise, instead of the other way around?

Chapter 6: Returning to Termina

After a lot of walking Link finally saw the end of the root and he jumped down falling slowly down hit something soft with a slight thump, he heard splashes to either side of him, opening his eyes he realised.
"WE'RE BACK WHERE WE STARTED!" Link yelled at Murray and Yellow who looked at him suddenly Link’s belly rumbled and he clutched it, "Now what do we do?" He asked.
"I say we should go to one of the dimensions and get some lunch!" Foxy said,
"But we shouldn’t just go into any dimension, we've got to stick to worlds we know, there are some pretty crazy dimensions like the world of broken glass and the world of a million suns!"
Link sat on the flower, "well let's go to Termina, it's close and doesn't have anything dangerous other than occasional monsters."

Link walked through the log which ended in a cliff with a Deku flower, "how do we cross?" Zeld asked, but Link already had out his Deku mask and popping it on his face he climbed into the flower and shot himself across to the other.
Weldar walked back and took a run up and making a leap much higher than a leap should go and managed to land at the opposite ledge, Foxy attempted the same leap and only managed to get half way, Yellow and I walked up to the other ledge and blasted the side with an odd metallic blaster which after firing left a hole in the ledge big enough to allow the rest of them to climb up.
"What was that?" Link asked,
"An Atomic Disassembler! Rips things apart atom by atom!" I said smiling and spinning it around on my finger accidentally blasting at Weldar who ducked and kept his distance from then on.

But that was easy compared to what came next, Deku Link, Weldar, Yellow and, by using his claws to swing on vines, Foxy, had easily gotten across the large stumps, Zeld was annoyed, if Link were to continue he might lose his target, suddenly one of the huge vines snapped and fell creating a large bridge that allowed Murray and Zeld passage to the others Link looked shocked "what a coincidence, of all times for that to happen, one second earlier and Foxy'd be crushed!"
Zeld chuckled as he watched a small dark energy bolt shrink away and disappear, no one would stop him completing his mission.

(that was the part I hate, also just to clarify, Zeld has his powers but isn't using them now!)

Chapter 7: Zelman, Definitely Foe

"So this is Termina, looks kind of dull..." Foxy Stated, however he realised that he was drawing a bit of attention so he quickly slinked back into the tower "You guys just bring me back something!"
Link looked around, he’d never found a place that actually sold food unless you counted the milk bar but it was closed and milk made him homesick.
Eventually Link found that in the east that there was an outdoor restaurant that had a week off around the carnival, pulling out his rupee bag he turned around to tell everyone it was on him but they were all gone.

Zeld was deep into the woods rethinking his plan, Link was now in a small city, Zeld didn’t think he would have the strength to fight off that many people and if Foxy was at the way out then he was in trouble but suddenly his thoughts were cut short.
Jumping out of a log Yellow popped out next to him and started bombarding him with nonsense questions while tackling him, Zeld's patience ran out.
Holding up both arms a dark energy started spiralling just before them, Yellow flew right in.

Minutes earlier Weldar had noticed Zeld missing and the only one who knew where he went was Yellow and Weldar actually believed him and trusted his directional sense.
Weldar had just caught up with Yellow who had taken him to the swamp, he saw Yellow flying into Zeld repeatedly, Weldar was just about to walk up and grab Yellow away when suddenly Yellow disappeared into a dark portal.
Weldar tried to run for it but was caught, Zeld demonstrated his yet unseen flying abilities and easily caught up blocking Weldar's path, and before he knew what had happened Zeld knocked him out with a heavy branch and was about to finish the job when suddenly Murray jumped down.

(The plot thickens!)

Que?

Hasn't that phrase been used before? And the word thickens been mistaken for sickens?
Yay great story!
Anyways, I just realized, Lizer's family sucks! His half-sister is an armageddon-capable bounty hunter, his mom's a tyrant bent on taking over her dimension, and the only sane person in it, his father, is 'dead'. Oh, and he has a disturbed, serious,(already introduced) eight year old step-cousin. Guess who.
Not like any but the last one will have a part, but here's hoping!
Also, Lizer, once he realizes he can change his anatomy, starts reading up on the anatomy of other creatures... and also his friends.
Lastly, how's the story going?

Ze ztoree? vat ar yoo tocking aboot? It be abzolutlee Purr-fekt! (I think I mick stup a few accents)

And yeah. Kudos to you, Murray!! You wouldn't want to suck this plot through a straw. You'd probably collaspse a lung.

I'm pretty sure sickens is a parody of thickens, also if you want to know the truth, the movie isn't completely finished yet but it probably will be by the time I'm finished putting up all the parts!... Logically...

Foxy's character has a slight bit more importance than others, also there's a bit of a continuity error, Weldar gets knocked out so easily here but later he is only injured after being slammed into the ground several times, my explanation for this is that Zeld slammed him on the head but the later attack only his front.

(hold your breath I forgot a part of that last chapter!!!!)

"THERE YOU ARE!" Murray exclaimed and grabbed Zeld's wrist, and pulled him along as if he were a child, but it didn't work as Zeld held strong and turned his attention to me, grabbing the same tree branch he held it behind his back to swing.
But just before he swung something stopped him, looking back he saw Weldar holding onto the branch with the remainder of his strength.
Zeld suddenly swung Murray over his head and right onto Weldar, then grabbing a vine tied the two to a tree and knocked it into the swamp.
"Three down two to go" Zeld said smiling to himself, he started to fly back to Clock Town but suddenly a sight above Clock Tower made him realise his work was done.

(You may now stop holding your breath, I guess there was a logical reason for Weldar's being knocked out after all, also the rescue of these two heroes I'd also like a redo for don't worry it's only one paragraph or so, *gives Foxy the big eye, quivering lip look*)

This message was edited by Murray3 on Apr 20 2008.

I'll see what I can do. Now, can I go back to holding my breath?
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*thud*

Chapter 8: Link’s defeat

Link started heading out of Clock Town, perhaps they went into the field Link thought but suddenly he heard screaming from behind him.
Running back inside the town he saw, on top of the Clock Tower a hideous... Thing!
It was covered in fleshy masks, it had one long arm that was reaching into the sky.
Suddenly what it was reaching at broke through the clouds, the moon, no longer hideously faced but still a threat, Link grabbed his sword that just now felt like a butter knife before this beast.
The top of the tower wasn't flat and wide like it was on the day of the carnival but round, small and constantly rotating, but the real problem was how to get up there.

Link grabbed his bow and fired a light arrow at the beast, light burst out of its skin and Link smiled at his direct hit but suddenly the light subsided and his arrow flew back out just missing the hero.
The monster was moving now, a fleshy and mask covered limb looked over at him, on the end sat Majora’s Mask.
"Liiiink, how good to see you again!" Majora said, its spikes moving about, Link took a step back as it moved up close to him.
"But I, I thought I--"
"Next time you'll think twice, I can't be harmed by you, not even the mask I gave you could keep me down forever!"
"What happened to the Happy Mask--"
"Oh he's here, only I don’t think he’s happy any more" Majora's spikes moved faster now.

"You, you did this to him didn't you!!" Link yelled.
"I only did what his heart desired..." Majora said disturbingly.
Suddenly Majora had to move out of the way as Link swung down his sword at Majora but missed by inches
He thrust his sword towards the mask But Majora dodged again, pulling out his bow he fired an ice arrow at the tentacle-like limb freezing it.
Unable to move Majora took a direct hit from the sword and then another, Link had Majora right where he wanted him and charged up his spin.
Link spun but suddenly another tentacle flew out of the body and smashed him hard against a wall.

Majora broke the ice off and went back to pulling on the moon, but suddenly two sharp objects entered his host and then exited.
Looking down again he saw Zora Link reattaching his fins, Majora tried to hit him again but Link jumped and fired a fin into the end of the tentacle pinning it down, running up the limb he sliced into the side of Majora with the other but as soon as he did two smaller tentacles grabbed him and slid under the mask pulling it off and adding it to the collection.
Majora laughed and threw Link off his retracting tentacle and onto the ground below, he laughed as he waited for the thud, but it never came.
Out of the nowhere Deku Link popped out hanging onto pair flowers and kicked a Deku nut at the Mask, the attack burnt Majora as he tried to knock Link out of the sky but two could play at this game, Majora grabbed Deku Link in one long tentacle but Link held on hard to a wall as Majora tugged harder, perfect.

Link let go and Majora pulled him in at an unexpected velocity but as he did Link changed into the heavy, rock eating Goron form that slammed hard into Majora knocking him off his pillar and removing his grip on the moon.
"YES!" Link called out but then realised how bad this new situation was, Majora grabbed his legs and ripped off his mask, pain shot through Link as he hit the floor once again and he dropped the Deku mask.
Link didn't even have time to think he ran to the mask but he wasn't fast enough, a tentacle slammed down on it knocking Link over as it retracted to help Majora climb the tower.
Link didn’t want it to come to this, putting on his final mask he transformed into the Fierce Deity.
Link swung his sword and fired all his magic out at Majora's hideous host blasting a huge hole out of it, Link panted as the many masks landed around town some still stuck together but then they started glowing.
Link looked around as they flew back up to their leader, Link ran towards Majora but he was so tired he collapsed as one, two, three tentacles slammed down on top of him.

(not one to nit-pick but if you breath through your mouth you'll be able to hold it longer!)

The NESS (Nefarious enigmatic Squaddy Squad) story 1: The naming

"Now that we have our group, lair and many strategies we leave only one minor thing..." Miyahon said...
"Have lunch?" Breathmint asked.
"No you fool, crush those--" Wolfy was interrupted.
"Nama tha taam?" Louie asked.
"Ooh how about the Chain Cutters?" Phobette suggested not knowing how relevant the name really was, "or the--"
"How about the Squaddy squad?" Breathmint asked.
"If I didn't need your help you'd be dead by no--" but Kurz was interrupted.
"The Squaddy Squad, we're in a kind of squad and we're all members of a squad that makes us kind of squaddy so the squaddy squad is a perfe--"
"SHUT UP NOW!" Miyahon yelled.
"So we're Squaddy Squad? Any objections?" Breathmint asked.
everyone but Louie glared at the parrot and Kurz looked ready to kill.
"If you shut up it'll be anything you want..." Torch said slowly.
"Then let's call it the cheesebus!" Breathmint yelled.
"Anything but that!" Torch said.
Auto stood against the wall quietly, he was always quiet.

(the story of the Squad's name, they now call it by that name as Breathmint refuses to move or fight if they don't)

Awesome! More movie!!

You guys are going to tell me when I can start posting my character on the story again, right?












Right?!

Oh, and Kly wants to know, too.