STORY- You start out as a Vampire with your clan called the Dark Bloods, their are four members, Deston(Main Character), Justin, Ken, Raven. You start the game attacking a town, killing innocent people. Deston is the only one that doesn't really enjoy killing the people for no reason, this may be due to the fact he isn't a full vampire, his mother was bitten while she was pregnant. Anyway he leaves them to their killing while he takes a walk around the town. He meets a guy named Jess who he actually talks to and decides not to tell his friends about. Later you head to your guy's hide out and you meet the only other vampire clan the Deaths, they are your rival clan. You guys fight, your team looses, and they also kill one of your team mates (Raven). Right before the next morning they get Deston to come out of the hide out with noises so he doesn't to check, but its a surprise attack! (AHHH) Your team looses again since they didn't really have a chance since they were sleeping, anyway Justin then feat up with his team mates that he thinks are just holding him back, he decides to attack them and go on his own evil rampage. He kills your only team partner you had left (Ken) and attacks you with a awesome spell, you are hurt but you have enough strength to ask Justin to please stop, and that if he did you guys could go back to how things used to be. Instead of stopping Justin says he doesn't want to go back to how things were, then he gets ready to use the spell one last time to finish Deston, but just then towns soldiers make a attack and Justin is distracted. You get away from Justin and to escape from the soldiers trying to stop the vampires you hide inside a house, you find out it is the house of Jess. You decide with Jess by your side that you will no longer stand for vampires and killing the innicent. Instead you go on a mission to kill your once friend Justin which turned his back and killed your only other team mate. But can you and Jess really kill your once leader which has more than twice his strength? Plus with the rival team the Deaths after him as well, can he really survive?
Any of those excellent tips for me?

hmmmm....I have to think about your's its a bit more complete then the last guy's story, so I don't know how much I can help you with...

Is there some sort of reason why Justin goes psycho? Maybe he didn't know about how the main character (forgot his name)wasn't a full vampire, but he realizes it when he starts to pity the townspeople they were attacking, he decides to test it by hiring the gang that attacked them to cut him with a sword that glows if it hits full vampires but does nothing to humans or part vampires. He does not want to do because he does not want loose the m.c.'s loyalty if he is a true vampire, cause he is the most powerful one of the group next to Justin, and the other guys are sort of weaklings. When the sword does nothing then Justin realizes that he isn't a full vampire and decides he wants to kill him.

He wants to kill the m.c. so much now because ten years before they formed their group, Justin went to a seer who prophesized that he would grow in power and rule over all vampires, if and only if he would never befriend a part-vampire. At the time he thought the prophesy was stupid and wrong, and didn't bother to do anything about it, but then he started to play around with magic and noticed that he was far better at it then other vampires so he was reminded of the prophesy. When they formed their group he still didn't bother to check, but as he grew in magical power, he began to grow more and more suspicious, so that's why the m.c. pity for humans set him off.

Well I hope you like those Ideas. I guess you have to fill in the wholes about why Justin is so powerful and whatnot, so good luck! I hope it turns out the way you want it!

Yeah thats a good point, I couldn't really figure out a way for Justin to be so mad that he would turn his back on his team. But the reason I was going with was because every time they had a battle with the other team (The Deaths) they lost. After a while Justin had enough of the loosing, so he decides he doesn't need them and that he will destroy everything on his own. I don't really see the idea of the sword not killing a half-vampire getting much use out of my story but thanks for the idea. I had in my story that they already knew he was a half-vampire and they make fun of him a little because of it.
One thing in the fight I couldn't really getting into in the story is that Deston(Main Character) has a conversation with Ken before Ken goes to bed, then Deston hears noises and goes outside to check them out. He follows those noises to a dark spot and thats when the Deaths jump him, Deston wants to yell and warn his friends but the Deaths says if he does they will kill him. So thats why one reason Justin gets so mad is because he feels like no matter what Deston should have warned the team. So Deston later has problems attacking Justin because he feels its his fault that Justin turned his back on the team since he didn't warn them. Well thats the way I have it written but if you have a better way tell me. Thanks for the ideas though.

no, your way is probably best. You just asked for my help and that's what I came up with. But, its YOUR story, so if that's how you did it, like I said before, its probably the better way. Because, no matter how much you tell me about it, you still no more, cause it's your story and you're attached to it so if you like something, then just go with it.

Good advice. Thanks for the tips and stuff. I am probable going to get a dex drive to share this game because I think its going to be a good one. Do dex drives work for the PS2? And if so how much do they cost? I was thinking it was only like 10 bucks.

Title: (TBD)

Premise: The WORLD (planet to be named later),approaching the end of the 1st Millennium of its 3rd life cycle, is engulfed in complete chaos. Kingdom fighting kingdom, monsters ,united, commiting acts of genocide, and nature unleashing her fury on all inhabiting elements. Desperate for peace, a group of druids attempt to resurrect the last great god, but, instead, bring back an ancient prophet of doom.

As the chaos intensifies and a great darkness begins to fall on the world, a devoted knight, a cutthroat pirate, an honorable samurai, an oucast mage, a monk, and archer are brought together to rid the WORLD of a 3rd Apocalypse.

Can these brave warriors come together to stop an unruly eternity or will their differences ignite an eternal darkness?

Characters:

Cyrus Darkmane-Pirate (I thought it was a cool name)

Sir Nicholas Derran-Knight (Nicholas: From the Greek for "victory and people")

Yoshiie Isamu-Samurai (Yoshiie: Means "goodness, luck" in Japanese; ISAMU: Means "bravery" in Japanese)

Sindri-Red Mage (SINDRI: Possibly means either "small, trivial" or else "sparkling" in Old Norse. In Norse legend this was the name of a dwarf who, with his brother Brokk, made many magical items for the gods.

Omega-Monk (OMEGA: This is the name of the last letter in the Greek alphabet. It is often seen as a symbol of completion.

Willow Dering-Archer (Another name I thought was cool sounding)

Montanus-Doomsday Prophet from the 1st 2 cycles (An alternate spelling of Mountainous)

Towns:
Nexus (The Core or Center) -Dark City

Crystal Valley (A Town in Colorado) -The Cursed Valley

Monomatapa (African equivalent to out "Lost City of Gold") -Kingdom (or city) of Gold


This is a concept in extremely early development and I know I suck at descriptions......lol. I'm a much better story teller than summarizer. Any opinions/suggestions would be greatly appreciated.

I love the names, they're great! You obviously put alot of time into thinking of them. Also, they choice of characters should be fun to make interact with each other. GOOD LUCK!

man, I can't wait for this game to come out!!!

Yeah neither can I wait for this game to come out. The more I hear and work on my story the more I feel like I need this game now. Anyways nice job Evil, I like how you know about your character names. How did you find all that out? Nice job on game idea.

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Yeah neither can I wait for this game to come out. The more I hear and work on my story the more I feel like I need this game now. Anyways nice job Evil, I like how you know about your character names. How did you find all that out? Nice job on game idea.

I really don't have an idea but I'm going to try and make one incorporating characters from my favorite anime shows (Rurouni Kenshin, Inuyasha, Lupin III, and Trigun)...

I'll probably do the same thing like you are thinking of Keaton. Not to copy what your idea or anything but insted I'll make one like Outlaw Star or my own Final Fantesy.

im gonna make a 3d version of seiken densetsu 3
(secret of mana 2) because that is my favorite game ever and i've mastered the story line. Im probobly going to make it duran's beginning and his 1rst partner would be Kevin, 2nd Lise.

Im Gonna Also make a Megaman Game! i think ill make u be Zero the whole time trying to find out why he was made and who made him. He will start out in the reploid base. he is acting very strange to everyone, megaman asks him whats wrong but Zero doesn't answer. He runs away to an old lab somewhere and hears a voice (you've probobly already guessed its wiley). It says Come here i can help you. Zero says Who the hell!? And starts to go closer to the voice. Wiley grabs at him but zero takes the Z saber And Cuts the ships claw thingy off (Wiley uses it to grab Zero). He starts charging At wiley. Of course Wiley Suddenly presses a random button and Teleports away(classic megaman). suddenly a broken robot comes to life and Attacks Zero. Thats the first boss. thats all i've thought of for now. there will be some monsters on the way to the old lab. plz comment. by the way, which of my ideas is better this or the secret of mana 2?

that could be pretty cool. I don't know too much about megaman though so I can't say too much more. Good luck with it!

My idea is you are a bunch alien hunters and you go to some planet, and your ship is attacked by aliens, then you are out trying to find out why they attacked you. Thats all I can think of right now.