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| Tiger of Wu |
Nov 16, 11 at 5:29pm ^
Tiger of Wu vs. finalfight (Hell Hath No Fury...)
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Three Battle Posts Each One Victory
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![]() [color=#666666]This message was edited on 2011-11-16T13:20:01-08:00. ------------------- To the devil on my shoulder I can't help but listen,
The angel never spoke to me, I guess I had a bad start, "He who fights monsters..." it is as it was written, Stared far too long and came out with a black heart. | |
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| finalfight |
Nov 16, 11 at 6:18pm ^
re: Tiger of Wu vs. finalfight (Hell Hath No Fury...)
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Falling from the sky was an angel. If one were a believer they might take this sight as some sort of omen, and perhaps it was. For that angel was the harbinger of doom. Unfortunately for him, that doom was his own.
Ged smacked into the ground with resounding force. His wings had managed to slow his fall somewhat, but the impact still stung like hell. He had been cut off in the midst of traveling between worlds, hurled to this planet and locked down by whatever force had set its sights on him. He needn’t ponder about that mysterious entity for long though. A fierce shrill went through the air, and the very sky seemed to tear apart as a fiery void stretched across it. They were only dots at first, but as they drew ever closer Ged saw what could only be called a Horde. Hell had found him. Such are the consequences of my ever rising popularity I suppose. Ged bowed toward the approaching demons, though at the current distance it was purely for the sake of appearance. “I do hate to be rude, but I wasn’t expecting to entertain guests at this time. Next time schedule your appointments in advance.” From black fire his staff appeared into his hands. Cutting into his flesh he began the process of opening a portal to escape through. Once he gained the power necessary he shook his staff into the air and waited for the portal to appear. It did not. He shook his staff again, and again the results were the same. “Well damn.” This time it was a roar that drew his attention as the first wave of hell’s minions made their way to him. The owner of that hell cry was a brutish looking combination of bear and man, its fang’s salivating at the thought of tasting an angel’s flesh. Ged was happy to oblige, never let it be said he wasn’t an accommodating man. The creature bit into his arm, and indeed its meal was sweet. The sensation of the angelic blood swirling in its mouth was too wonderful to appropriately describe. Its elation soon turned to panic as the blood tore into its tongue and throat, shredding them into pieces. It threw Ged away from it to try and end the necromancer’s sorcery, but the damage had already been done. It let out one final scream as it exploded in a ball of blood and black flame. Its comrades simply crushed the bits of its gore still left into the ground. If Ged had hoped to slow down their charge he was gravely mistaken. Letting out a scowl , he turned and prepared to run. ------------------- ![]() False hope leads to true despair, watch how quickly white turns to black. | |
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| Tiger of Wu |
Nov 16, 11 at 6:41pm ^
re: Tiger of Wu vs. finalfight (Hell Hath No Fury...)
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Falling from the sky was an angel. Watching from a distance was a demon.
Emote wasn't around and the IUA had replied to none of Malali's attempts at contact. Maitrey and Danog, two of Emote's most trusted and beloved disciples, had tried to convince the nightelf to not get involved. Naturally, they had failed. "Sssomething buzzzesssss," Firine purred as they neared the area. Suvi was terrified, but he flew true. Malali didn't reply to the demon at her waist, she simply focused. There was something definitely wrong about what was happening, or was about to happen. The Firins gave nothing but cryptic clues; perhaps even they didn't know what it was, which was the most disconcerting thing. If The Fifth Circle had found a way to track Malali down they could be dealt with, but if it was something else... the nightelf shook her head and strengthened her resolve. She was a warrior of Lar, a hunter of Tyrnealylth, slayer of The Deathknight. She would not falter. As she arrived at the source of the imbalance, she saw a cloaked creature fall from the sky. His body was covered and he stunk of death and decay. "Tetrath..." Malali whispered, watching him fall. Wings sprouted to lessen the impact as he hit the ground, and the nightelf smiled for but a second. "Is this it? Shall we run free?" Firinar asked, uncharacteristic delight in his voice. Malali said nothing, simply watched as hell opened and unleashed itself upon the creature who was most certainly not Tetrath. Watching him die by the hand of his own ilk seemed more enjoyable than killing him herself, so Malali watched and waited. Suvi kept pulling away, wishing only to turn back to the safety of Emote's city, but the nightelf held him steady. Then the oddest of things happened... Ged began to run. "Even with new trinkets you still fall short, demon," she muttered, looking upon Ged's staff. A quick kick into Suvi's side caused the bird to fly forward, and from within the chained kama the Firins giggled. Ged ran, the earth exploding behind him to hold off the army which gave chase. Golems of rock and dirt were formed but, unable to concentrate properly, Ged watched them be taken out with ease. He considered his options, until Malali came down from above. She landed right in front of him, her war-hammer slamming into the ground and causing the area to shake. The night's sky was strong, and so Eclipse glowed vibrantly, Lunaris almost blinding the two of them as Malali landed. Ged looked back to the hordes of hell then to the nightelven creature before him, and he grimaced. "He'sss not Tetrath." "He's close enough." ------------------- To the devil on my shoulder I can't help but listen,
The angel never spoke to me, I guess I had a bad start, "He who fights monsters..." it is as it was written, Stared far too long and came out with a black heart. | |
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| finalfight |
Nov 16, 11 at 7:01pm ^
re: Tiger of Wu vs. finalfight (Hell Hath No Fury...)
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Two unexpected encounters in the same day? Don’t these people realize I’m a busy man? Ged eyed the night elf as warily as he could while still acknowledging the fast approach of the demons behind him. What was there to say that hadn’t been said with the woman’s blades? He knew this one, Malali, on any other day she would make quite the prize.
Shattered bits of rock passed by his head as his only remaining golem was obliterated. Ged knew that he had to deal with the real threat, but even alone Malali would be a handful. As he felt the beginning of some fire breathing creatures attack bake his neck he made a quick dash to his side. Malali, with a much better view of the army, anticipated the movement. Even as Ged moved to his left he felt the weight of her blade enter his side. His blood leapt free eager to strike some form of vengeance, but the nightelf’s reflexes were more than enough to get away from such an attack. Some form of wolf raked its way across Ged’s back, causing him to throw it off of him towards Malali. Springing back to its feet the creature leaped to attack again, but its target this time was not Ged, but instead the warrior. The creature met its fate at the end of her sword. Ged let out a brief smile, “Well that’s interesting." And then they were in the thick of it. Ged’s eyes were able to pick up that they had been surrounded. The blood spilling from his wounds wrapped him in fire. Golems took far too much time to do any good, but Ged had another talent for such situations. One that was far more satisfying. Lunging toward the nightelf Ged thrust out his staff, as he did this he felt some small demon latch itself onto his back and begin tearing away. No matter, Malali was the important one, she evaded the blow, but was prevented from a proper counter attack by another demon’s desire to play with her. Ged had reached his intended target though, with Malali gone he let his blood fall freely to the ground. The body that had been laying there rose, letting out a silent howl as it was ushered into its second life. Ged may not be able to do much in this situation, but as long as he was surrounded by the dead he felt right at home. Now to make new bodies to play with. ------------------- ![]() False hope leads to true despair, watch how quickly white turns to black. | |
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| Tiger of Wu |
Nov 16, 11 at 7:20pm ^
re: Tiger of Wu vs. finalfight (Hell Hath No Fury...)
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With Eclipse clipped to the back of her armour, Malali swung Kaavel viciously down into the shoulder of some humanoid beast with red limbs and black eyes. His mouth shot open and out of it came a torrent of fire, which did nothing but burn the creature behind the nightelf. Pulling her sword free, she spun and took the legs from the fire-breather before turning to Ged.
He appeared heavily damaged, if not on the verge of defeat; blood poured from his numerous wounds, yet he still stood, proud and strong, smiling. A wolf-like creature jumped towards Malali and she impaled it upon her sword before using it like a club upon two of the closer demons; once they fell, she pulled her sword free and ran towards Ged again. At least five demons stood before him, fighting the others off. "Mind control or-" "Necromancccy," Firine responded, not waiting for the question to be asked in full. The demons were quick to fall and quicker to rise, easily defeated and easily manipulated. Malali couldn't help but glance at the sky-portal, from which more poured as the seconds passed. "We could work together," Ged shouted behind even more resurrected minions, and a cloak of black fire. He had surrounded himself with his puppets, and the demons attacked them without bias; those that fell rose again, and the numbers only grew. "I'll make you a good deal." Malali ignored his words, considering their situation. "Syldrim!" she roared viciously, using her magic to clear the immediate area. With a moment of reprieve the nightelf threw Kaavel into the air, and then pulled the Firins from her belt. As Kaavel came back down to the ground Firine grabbed the blade, wrapping herself around it's handle. Malali pulled Eclipse, her war-hammer, free as well, and Firinar took it in much the same way. It was only a few moments before the horde was back upon her. Holding one end of the chain in each hand, Malali swung the Firins around and spun with the grace of a ballerina, Kaavel cutting through the demons with ease and Eclipse shattering them. From behind his protection, Ged laughed. "Thank you, nightelf, I was running out of corpses," he yelled, hoping to distract her enough that she would make a mistake. She only smiled. "I'm not helping you, demon," she replied, Ged seeming to take offence at the term. "I'm simply waiting." "For what?" Ged asked, his voice taking a sour turn. An ear-piercing cry came from the portal, accompanied by the sound of horns being blown. A gargantuan ball of fire flew towards Ged, taking out his puppets as he narrowly escaped unscathed. "For the cavalry," Malali replied, but the necromancer found it impossible to see her. ------------------- To the devil on my shoulder I can't help but listen,
The angel never spoke to me, I guess I had a bad start, "He who fights monsters..." it is as it was written, Stared far too long and came out with a black heart. | |
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Nov 16, 11 at 7:40pm ^
re: Tiger of Wu vs. finalfight (Hell Hath No Fury...)
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Demons and their silly traditions. What was the point of using up all those hapless minions, when you had creatures of this power at your beck and call? Where before the demons had been roughly humanoid they were now the shapes of beings meant for fairy tales. And not the happy ones.
A large winged minotaur was the first to approach Ged. He had lost Malali after the fire ball, and it seemed as though the demons would not give him the courtesy of letting him find her once more. What could only be a dragon shot forth yet another blast, the power of which rumbled inside Ged’s bones as he was forced to dodge yet again. I have got to get me one of those. He got gored by the minotaur’s horn for his trouble. The hole in his body was rather large as the minotaur shook its head around, cutting deeper and deeper into Ged’s insides. His blood ate away at the intrusion, until he was tossed away. The remnants of the horn fell free along with some of Ged’s insides. “It would appear that we have gotten off on the wrong foot.” “The master says you must die.” “Does he now? How kind of him to think about me.” The demon charged, but Ged was more than ready. As he prepared to throw his own fire into the creatures face he felt a small pinch in his chest. Looking down he saw an arrow. “Crap.” And then the arrow exploded, dividing Ged up into all sorts of edible pieces for the demon’s to eat. And boy did they want to eat him, the rush as they circled around his meat soon broke out into a fight until the dragon ended the argument with a well placed fire ball. It enjoyed its flame broiled meal alone as the jealous demons glared at it with envy. After it was finished gorging itself it let out a delighted belch of fire. Sniffing in the air it shrieked and took flight, landing next to the hidden night elf. Ged’s voice came through the creatures mouth, “Hello again Malali.” The dragon roared. ------------------- ![]() False hope leads to true despair, watch how quickly white turns to black. | |
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| Tiger of Wu |
Nov 16, 11 at 8:01pm ^
re: Tiger of Wu vs. finalfight (Hell Hath No Fury...)
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"We havvve got to get ourssselvesss one of thossse," Firine remarked as she plunged Kaavel into the dragon's jaw. It cut through sufficiently, but the size made the attack too unremarkable for it to notice.
"We already do," Firinar replied, moving to attack in kind but getting orders which stated to do otherwise. These demons are routed in magic; three hundred should be enough. Without word, Malali ran. The Firins wrapped themselves around her arms, Kaavel and Eclipse dancing on the end of the chains as if held by tentacles of a Lovecraftian abomination. "None of that," Ged's voice muttered from within the dragon. The beast fired a torrent of flames at the nightelf, and after it receded Ged saw Malali run on, unscathed; she had covered her head with a mask, which appeared to be made from the same material as her armour. Thinking of the other troublesome people he had fought before, the dragon beat its wings and flew ahead of Malali, landing in front of her. She didn't break her run or hesitate, she just continued on, directly towards the beast, then pulled an arrow free. "Caelza!" she shouted, aiming the arrow at the creature as it glowed brightly. Without the full incantation the arrow only glowed, nothing more, but it was enough. Ged hesitated when the nightelf grew close, and she launched herself skywards and soared over the creature, narrowly avoiding its snapping jaw. Before long, she was back amidst the demons. Kaavel and Eclipse swung wildly, taking out groups of demons with single strikes, whilst Malali fired shot after shot from her bow into everything that caught her eye. Once one hundred were dead, the dragon tried to land atop and crush her; avoiding it, Malali went on to have to dive away from its fire which took out another fifty. They continued like this for a few minutes, until the number of dead was sufficient. The Firins dropped Eclipse and Kaavel and then shot themselves towards the dragon, burying their blades into its neck. It cried out in unintelligible gibberish, and the demons took it as an order to retreat, to leave Malali alone. "What is this?!" Ged shouted, audible only to himself and Malali. The nightelf didn't reply, she simply held up Kaavel; colourful energy from the dead demons gathered into the sword, and it glowed with a sign of what was to come. Malali began to chant, however it was cut short when Ged's staff burst out of the dragon's stomach and into Malali's hand, knocking Kaavel away. "If I let you bring your own dragon, this wouldn't be as special!" he shouted. "We can't hold much longer," Firinar stated, his voice cracking as Ged reinforced the dragon's will, trying to push them out. Kaavel was amidst the demons now, and without a full moon or midday sun Eclipse wouldn't be as useful as needed. The dragon roared, fire shooting into the sky, and the Firins shot out of its neck like bullets from a gun. They hit Malali and exploded in a cloud of black smoke; when the smoke settled Ged saw the two demons in corporal form, mirroring Malali's appearance and holding large scythes, grinning. ------------------- To the devil on my shoulder I can't help but listen,
The angel never spoke to me, I guess I had a bad start, "He who fights monsters..." it is as it was written, Stared far too long and came out with a black heart. | |
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Nov 16, 11 at 8:22pm ^
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More demons? I’m starting to wonder why I even like the things so much. A scythe cut threw his talons as he swiped at one of the Firins. It laughed and with great speed repeatedly hacked away at Ged’s retreating leg, only backing off from its pursuit as a bout of fire headed its way. Ged looked the gleeful expression in the Firins eyes as it attacked and he had his answer. Demons are just too damn adorable.
“I don’t care how sweet you are I can’t let you live I’m afraid.” The dragon took to the sky again, streaming down fire even as it rose. The demons didn’t seem to mind at all and simply took to the sky with him, landing on his back and setting to work disassembling him. “That simply won’t do.” A figure that appeared to be Ged rose out from the dragon scales to address the twin demons. It looked down at its dragon half, “I suppose I can’t be expected to do all the work can I?” His staff appeared in his hands, but as they were made of dragon scale there was nothing to pierce. But there was a delightful wound on the dragons back, and the staff was more than happy to plunge into this new drink. Ged’s blood was powerful, but a dragon’s blood was not a poor substitute. He rushed toward the two, scythes greeting his approach. They entered him easily enough, but his body shifted and held the blades into place. The Firins vented their frustration as they tried to remove their scythes. Doubling their efforts they tore their weapons free. “Thisss one isss mine.” “Oursss.” “Fine.” Ged tutted. “My dear Gentlemen and Lady, I’m afraid your mistaken.” The staff now brimming with power erupted in dark energy, sending the demons flying off the dragon’s back. The remaining energy fell into the beast, giving it a dark aura. “If distance doesn’t work, we might as well make things personal.” The dragon dove toward the trio black tendrils ready to do their part, and fire burning in its throat. ------------------- ![]() False hope leads to true despair, watch how quickly white turns to black. | |
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| Tiger of Wu |
Nov 16, 11 at 8:40pm ^
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Even those of the weakest minds can have the strongest hearts, Malali thought, watching as the two demons assaulted the dragon. The other demons were back upon her, continuing their previous assault, but before any real damage could be done she was gone.
"Play time," Firinar muttered, holding his scythe high after he had been thrown back to the ground. "Ssso much fun to be had," Firine remarked, looking at the creatures around them. They dared not approach the trio as the dragon dived towards them. Malali stood between the two, saying nothing. "And we're ssstuck here." She gave an annoyed glare to Malali, who didn't react. "Think about our reward," Firinar muttered, to which Firine lit up with glee. The brother jumped to meet the dragon as the sister stood with Malali; the three of them were engulfed in fire, and then crushed. The dragon picked itself up and shook off the daze from the impact, looking down upon the chained kama, no longer corporeal, and the broken body of their master. Malali writhed on the ground, but she just wouldn't die. Even those of the weakest minds can have the strongest hearts. Suvi screeched loudly. The bird hated being above a battle like this, and he hated watching Malali fight. Ged ignored the bird's pain, looking back down at the nightelf. She smiled. "Sssuch an idiot," Firine mocked, her voice coming from Malali's mouth. Ged's cold and shrivelled heart sank as she disappeared, leaving behind only her mask; it was an illusion. Suvi screeched again. In spite of his fears he had swooped down and collected Malali, keeping her hidden above the clouds, and before the dragon could defend itself Malali came down from the bird's back and used Kaavel to slice the beast's head off in one clean stroke. Thunder sparked and the earth rumbled as the nightelf landed, the dragon's head next to her. The dragon fell, and the other demons around them cried out in anger. "Is that all?" Ged called as the dragon pushed itself up. "Pardon the cliché, nightelf, but I was expecting more!" The dragon stood headless, fire shooting from its neck. The demons around them fell quiet, until a few of the bigger ones howled harrowing screams of rage. "You've given yourself away, necromancer," Malali stated as the demons closed in on the dragon. Ged didn't seem fazed, until Malali pulled a vial of liquid from her armour. Ged was too busy being attacked by the others, and the others were no longer concerned with Malali. She threw the vial far into the hordes of hell, where it wouldn't reach Ged, and then she fired an arrow at it. The arrow smashed the vial leaving the potion within, Tiaoro Strand Serum X5, to shower those beneath it. Colours flashed as the demons grew in size, turning into titan-like creatures of great power. As one they looked towards Ged, he who had killed and controlled their commander, he who they were tasked with finally destroying, and they charged. [color=#666666]This message was edited on 2011-11-16T12:53:45-08:00. ------------------- To the devil on my shoulder I can't help but listen,
The angel never spoke to me, I guess I had a bad start, "He who fights monsters..." it is as it was written, Stared far too long and came out with a black heart. | |
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| Rust |
Nov 17, 11 at 12:53am ^
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Judging as I read because I have a short attention span
![]() Also apologizing for the lack of intricate feedback because of my short attention span Spoiler:FiFi You were less off than Tiger, but still, how dare you ![]() Intro: I liked your intro, except I'm not sure where exactly you are. The minions of hell come out and there's a tear through the sky indicating Hell, but you're not in Hell, are you? Other than that, it's a pretty good intro that shows off an inkling of Ged's power for later misuse. Battle 1: Most everything here makes sense, good job. Though it makes me wonder if Ged ever runs out of blood. I'm sure I'm going to be asking that even more in the coming fight xD Battle 2: This post lacked a lot of Malali, but it made sense. So far this is my favorite battle post, if only because of being eaten by dragons. Battle 3: Your first bit of dialogue needs more commas Dx In fact, there's a few commas that are misplaced here. Overall, it seemed like your grammar went downhill in this post here and there. I had to read it a few times in order to understand what you were doing, but luckily no more than that. Spoiler:Tabby Shame on you for not adhering to the time limit ![]() Intro: I really liked your first two sentences, but once I went to about the halfway point I was confused from where Malali knew Ged from. I'm think it was in the Coast n Shop, but the fact that you didn't state it makes me second-guess myself. Rust don't like that ![]() Battle 1: Nice battle, and I'm a sucker for good dialogue. Didn't see anything wrong with this. Battle 2: An action-packed post that was very well written, but Ged's last line in this post didn't really sit well with me. It seemed as though it were out of character, personally. Battle 3: A real nice finisher. I can't see anything wrong with this post, either Spoiler:Resultsie Despite having been over the time limit, I have to give this one to Tiger. He's a veteran of speed writing, and his posts prove it. ------------------- | |
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| Bale Fire |
Nov 18, 11 at 12:01pm ^
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Since I'm apparently Tiger's Queen, I suppose I had better get around to this.
Spoiler:finalfight Your first post was good. It introduced the situation fairly well, and I liked the description of the portal failing to work, as well as the wolf demon's death. There were a few minor things I would have fixed up, but considering this is a speed duel only one or two are worth mentioning. For instance, at the end of the first paragraph I would have written it as "Unfortunately for him, the only doom he had brought was his own." Instead of "Unfortunately for him, that doom was his own." No particular reason, I just think it flows better. Also, the dialogue at the end of the third paragraph "Well damn." Sounds a little plain following Ged's earlier speech. I would have changed it to something like "Well, that isn't good." Or something like that. I also wouldn't have minded a little more description of the location of this duel. Your character can apparently see the demons approaching in the distance, so the place is apparently pretty open, but a few more words would have been nice. Otherwise though, this was good. Your first battle post was also pretty good. I will note however that two demons throw themselves onto Ged's back in a row, which is a little repetitive. Also, towards the end, I assume Ged is trying to get to the body of the demon that Malali had slain just before. If that's what is happening, then I would have mentioned that. I also noticed towards the middle that you had a small error. "As he felt the beginning of some fire breathing creatures attack bake his neck". It should be "creature's" not "creatures". This post didn't particularly wow me in any way, but it wasn't bad. This battle post felt a bit like it was a transition into something greater, but it performed its role well enough. I would have written Ged was "impaled" on the Minotour's horn, rather than "gored" as the latter is a little ambiguous. I found the idea of Ged exploding very amusing though, especially when it was followed by being eaten by and then possessing a dragon. Not much else to really say about this post. I'm not sure adorable is the word I would use to describe demon copies of Malali, but I appreciated the sentiment none the less. The dialogue at the beginning of the second paragraph definitely needed a comma, but aside from that there really weren't any mistakes or errors. Considering that this was your final battle and it involved a possessed dragon, I don't think the battle here was quite as intense as it could have been. It was well described and written however, so I would still put it as high quality. Just not quite as good as what it could have been. Spoiler:Tiger of Wu All things considered, this post was a decent start. You explained why your character was there and all that stuff, and had the two characters meet up and ready to fight. I found it odd that you described Ged's body smelling of death and decay. Either Malali was very close, in which case you should have described that, or else it comes off as a bit unrealistic. I felt there was a bit of a lost opportunity in not describing the location. It could have been done very easily with Malali's bird eye view. The dialogue at the end was a nice touch. There were a few minor things I would have changed in this post. Right at the beginning for instance, you describe a demon as a "he", while I would have called it an "it". You also write that Malali "took the legs" of the monster. Personally I would have clarified this, as it could be interpreted as her literally cutting its legs off, crippling them, or just knocking the beast down. These aren't exactly mistakes, but these bits could have been improved. My first thought upon reading the last paragraph was that Emote had joined the fray, but reading it again that doesn't really make sense. The second battle post was overall pretty good, but there were again some things I would have changed. Just glossing over the killing of 300 enemies kind of weakens the impact of the whole fight, also was it Kaavel or something else that was storing that magical energy? Because I honestly never knew the sword could do that. I liked the echoing between Ged's and the Firins words, as well as the latter's introduction towards the end. This was probably my favourite of all your posts. I was a little confused to when exactly Suvi picked up Malali during the fight, and when exactly the illusion began as well for that matter. I did like the ending though, beheading the dragon and empowering the demons. I'm not quite sure about the significance of the "Even those of the weakest minds can have the strongest hearts." line though. Unless it meant Suvi, but I don't see that as likely. Spoiler:Judgement I'm going to have to go with Tiger of Wu here. You both stuck to the time limit pretty well, and the writing was good too. But Tiger seemed able to toss more content into each post, particularly towards the end of the duel. Congratulations to both of you for an excellent speed duel. ------------------- | |
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| Tiger of Wu |
Dec 01, 11 at 10:44am ^
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Malali didn't recognise Ged as Ged, she still thought he was Tetrath up until the very end of the intro. Ironically, I didn't want to confuse people by calling him Tetrath when not in Mally's speech, and didn't really have the time to ponder it at length. Ged's smell was a metaphor. Not a well thought out one, I admit, but it was more magical recognition, using smell because Mally's a hunter and whatnot. And the magical energy storage was for the sake of summoning Kaa like what happened in The Executioner duel, but Ged interrupted before she could begin the process. And the weakest mind's line was speaking of Suvi, since he's a big coward and all. I think that's everything. Thanks for judging and all that, and if Tsengy ever finds the time her input would still be appreciated. Fifi, I look forward to fighting you on more level ground in the future Malali smiled. It was a bitter smile, a cold and resentful smile, but she smiled nonetheless. It was a smile of victory. The Firins were unconscious, or at least whatever their equivalent of unconsciousness was. Their tongues would be silent, leaving Malali to just watch. Perhaps they were dead. Her smile grew wider. Ged Tenshi's voice pierced through the cold night, a wordless roar of horror and pain. He remained within the headless dragon as two demons, twice the dragon's size, held it down and third slowly ripped off one of its wings. The nightelf was tempted to pile up some of the bodies into a make-shift chair and watch the torture, but alas the necromancer had proven himself beyond death and pain. No rest for the wicked. Malali spun Kaavel around herself as if it were a baton and she was in a parade. The demons around her, too busy cheering on their kin, exploded in gore and left a small area to appease Suvi. Under his master's orders, the Rukh swooped down and pulled her back into the air. He wouldn't dare go close to the small gatherings of titans and their captive, so Malali had to shout over the chaos and screams. "Two choices, Necromancer!" she yelled, causing Suvi to screech slightly. "Go through the portal, or stay here with me! If you find me feisty, you will certainly enjoy Emote's company!" Amidst the pained screams was a hint of amusement, and a hint of something else. Malali nodded. Suvi ascended further, and Malali jumped from the bird towards one of the demon-titans. The first was humanoid, seemingly something born mortal and taken by the underworld; Kaavel cut through the top of its head with ease, biting into whatever was left of its brain and causing it to fall forward. With a mixture of spells, the nightelf set the demon alight and jumped to another; the fire spread quickly and the burning titan fell into another, wolf-like demon and set it on fire as well. The third, wing-ripping titan, also humanoid, felt Kaavel bite into his chest with Malali hanging from it. She curled around the weapon so as to have her body upside down, hand gripping the handle and legs up in the air. As expected, the huge demon swatted his hand down as if to shoo a bothersome fly; the nightelf spoke a spell of strength and protection combined, and as the hand swatted her she flew down to the ground, opening up the demon from chest to groin. The titan fell atop the headless dragon, and the few gargantuan demons around them stepped back. The back of the wing-ripper's body pushed upwardly, and then Ged's dragon burst the demon open with its claws and crawled out. Its open neck had been morphed into a deformed mouth, jagged bone teeth lining a hole which moved with great effort. It had been eating through the giant demon, and where its wing had been ripped off was a scale-less replica made of jagged bone and rotted, black flesh. The dragon looked towards Malali with its deformed mouth, and then it roared with what was left of its throat, blood gushing from its many open wounds. The nightelf mockingly saluted, then the dragon took to the sky. It flew shakily but quickly, and before long both it and Ged had gone through the hell portal. The few titans that still lived quickly followed him, and before long the portal closed behind them. A large part of the small army remained behind, and their attention turned entirely to Malali. Her grip around Kaavel tightened, and she smiled once more. ------------------- To the devil on my shoulder I can't help but listen,
The angel never spoke to me, I guess I had a bad start, "He who fights monsters..." it is as it was written, Stared far too long and came out with a black heart. | |
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Dec 03, 11 at 11:38pm ^
re: Tiger of Wu vs. finalfight (Hell Hath No Fury...)
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Yeah, so, this thread exists. I apologise for my non-timely response -_- I'm a terrible person.
As a general comment, since it’s a speed duel I won’t be commenting on grammatical errors/typos like I normally would, since I’ll assume they’re produced by the duel’s nature. Finalfight Spoiler:Fifi Intro: A good start. With the serious first few lines then ending with the... I’m not sure what to call it, dry comedy? That characterises Ged, it’s a nice led-in even for those who’ve never read any of your work before. While I like the way of getting him to the battleground, and his subsequent reaction to it (“well damn.” In particular was a very well placed line) I’m a little confused as to why he can’t use a portal to escape, although I imagine that will be elaborated on later. I’ll be watching ![]() Nitpicking – I don’t like the phrase “fierce shrill”. I don’t really consider shrill to be a word that can be described, and rather as a describing word. As my internet hates me, I won’t open the dictionary to check, and therefore will assume it’s just me. Just in case, though. It’s always nice to see Ged getting an early start on his devouring of hope and shredding of bodies. Most of the things I would be able to comment on here are structural or grammatical really, since it’s the first post, so a general thumbs up for this. Post 1: While there was a lot of fighting in this post, not much of it was against Malali. Additionally, you’ve gone from her wielding Eclipse to cutting his side with a blade (I’m assuming you mean Kaavel, since warhammers generally don’t have blades). Again, too, I find myself amazed at how much blood Ged has in his body, but by this point I’ve learned to accept that he is a machine of blood production ![]() I still like Ged’s voice; it makes me smile a little every time he opens his mouth (or even thinks). I notice that he doesn’t actually do anything with the demon on his back at the end, is this on purpose, or have I misread what he does? Post 2: Haha, happy fairy tales? I didn’t think they existed! On the one hand, I don’t really like the casual description of how Ged is gored, with just a reference to the horrible wounds in his body being ‘rather large’, but at the same time I have to take into account that it’s Ged we’re talking about and he probably sees his intestines all over the floor before he even has breakfast. I’m also not fond of how the second part of this post reads, although I’m unsure how much of that is due to the time constraints you wrote it under. It’s described so passively that I don’t get a sense of the action going on, despite the fact that Ged has literally just exploded. Additionally, like the first post there was a decided lack of Malali in this one. Post 3: An increase in typos here compared to your previous post. I know I said I wouldn’t point it out, but there was a marked rise in their number here, and it was beginning to make it tough to read. For a final post, the events that happened in it weren’t particularly interesting. The Firins cut the dragon up a bit, then he supercharged his staff, then he dark energised his dragon like the evil twin of the battery bunny, and then... it stops. I would have preferred, assuming you had the time, for him to do something huge and impressive with the fire instead of handing it off to Tiger to finish with. Tiger of Wu Spoiler:El Tigre Intro: A very nice use of the first line of fifi’s post to begin your own. Props for that. Suvi is adorable, and I fear for his safety in the coming battle. As a post, this is good. There’s nothing in particular to make it stand out, although I don’t really expect that of an intro post. I suppose you didn’t have the luxury of unleash the furies of hell on Malali and had to rely on her watching them, but even so, not a huge amount happened compared to Fifi’s post. Not necessarily a negative for an intro, but not a plus, either. Post 1: The same issue here as I had with Fifi’s post, in that while there’s plenty of fighting, hardly any of it is against Ged himself. The fighting is good, though, despite the fact that I had a little difficulty envisioning exactly what she was doing with the Firins – they’re grabbing Kaavel and Eclipse as if they’re in their humanoid form, but she’s swinging them as if they’re the kama? And if they are, how do they grab the weapons, with the chains? I’m confused. This may just be me, but still. Post 2: Again with the callbacks I approve.I assume you mean ‘rooted’ in magic? Otherwise I’m not really sure what you’d mean. Ah! Now there’s a good description of how the kama are holding the other weapons. Would probably have done better in the previous post, but at least it’s there. At last, someone is engaging the duellist they’re meant to be fighting! And the idea of a dragon birthing Ged’s staff like the titular creatures from Alien is a horrifying thing to picture It does seem a little like a waste of a post to have more than half of it building up to something which never happens. Somewhat anticlimactic. Then again, I suppose tactics do fail occasionally, and Ged has a point there.Post 3: You didn’t really use the dark power Ged had given to the dragon to particularly good effect in this post. I liked the use of Suvi, the poor thing, and the Firin’s illusions, but I think the strongest part of the post was probably its ending. It certainly wasn’t what I was expecting in a finale, and certainly makes sense from a tactical point of view. That said, Malali may as well not have bothered fighting him at all, if she interrupts the hordes of hell, then leaves and boosts them a little at the end. Judgement: Spoiler:Judgings Augh, my brain hurts, so I apologise if my feedback wasn’t particularly good. I hope it's somewhat useful, at least. Anyway, I think this one is going to Tiger of Wu. His posts were noticeably longer and therefore contained more expansive content, and his writing style under pressure was also better. That said, I think that in a non-speed setting this would have been a much harder duel to call, and if you ever do that, sign me up to judge it too! ------------------- I can't feel my own skin, Twins of spun glass and solitude.
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