Alchemists

Alchemists

by Roxas Cloud

*To clear up some issues...The blue circle in Issue 5 is Earth, the green circle is the Deoxys homeworld. The Deoxys homeworld is all unforested, since Deoxys can float. So they are floating in those panels.*

Characters

Aiden
A veteran Trainer who was taking a break when running into a trainer in trouble. He has a sense of justice. His Pokemon include a Scizor, Gardevoir, and Absol.

Jacob
A young trainer with potential, who was at the wrong place at the wrong time. He just wants to have fun with Pokemon and live a normal life, not wanting to be sucked up into things. His Pokemon include Shinx, Monferno, Turtwig, and a Bronze-colored Geodude.

Giovanni
The leader of Team Rocket, and the head of a secret project to change Pokemon.

Team Rocket
The crime organization that is new to the Hoenn region. They have suddenly come into alot of money, and are working on sneaky experiments.

King Deoxys
The king of all Deoxys'. Giovanni's machine turned him into part Cotton Candy, and he has sworn revenge.

Gabe
A crime-fighter and investigator, and also one of Aiden's friends. He tries to disband all crime organizations, and has many people behind him. His Pokemon include Salamence and Aggron, and another Pokemon he recently caught.

Adg
A member of Team Magma, she was labeled a traitor when she wanted to protect Lavaridge. When saved by Aiden and Gabe, she joined them to help beat Team Magma. Her Pokemon include Mawile, Misdreavus, and Murkrow.

Maxie
The leader of Team Magma, a crime organization that has been stealing people and Pokemon for experiments. He does not want to fall behind Team Rocket, but he does not know what he is trying to do with his experiments.

Tayl
A friend of Aiden and Gabe from a far-away region. She came to visit and decided to help them with anything that they needed. Her Pokemon include Espeon, Torchic, and Mantyke.

Benji
The financial advisor to Maxie, leader of Team Magma. He is rich and likes money, and has friends in high places. If he has Pokemon or what they are is still unknown.

Archie
The leader of Team Aqua. He understands Alchemy, and seems to be ahead of everyone else.

Goals

[X] Make 30 Issues
[ ] Make 50 Issues
[ ] Make 90 Issues
[ ] Make 120+ Issues
[X] Get Shiny's Approval/ He likes it
[ ] Get 1 Fan
[ ] Get 2 Fans
[ ] Get 5 Fans
[ ] Get 10 Fans
[X] Make a Crossover Comic with DDD2
[ ] Make a Crossover Comic with w111j
[ ] Make a Crossover Comic with euben
[ ] Make a Crossover Comic with Shiny
[X] Blow up Team Y Base

quote Shiny

It's not a bad comic, but I still thing that there are a couple of things that need to be addressed, mainly within the fifth issue.

Firstly, the second and third panels... It just doesn't look right when you make a blue circle and expect us to believe it's Earth and a green circle for Deoxys' planet.

Also, the plot (in that particular issue) is sorta hard to follow. It wasn't until I read the character descriptions that I actually understood what King Deoxys was angry about. And it's also strange that the background is just a load of trees and some of them are standing half-on half-off the trees.

The plot is fine and easy to follow in the first four though, so try to maintain that standard. This comic has a lot of potential.

Shiny said it all. Anyway, you're off to a good start, and I hope to see more from you.

I'm too slow. =( But it looks good so far.

quote Roxas Cloud

Well, my computer didn't want to work last night, but I got it to work today. So heres the next one

Spoiler: Issue 6

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And the plot is revealed

Improving. Hope to see more.

It's been a slow few days in PokeFiction, hasn't it? I got a few done, so I thought I would post them.

Thanks
I was a little worried about copying you like that, but when I came up with the comic idea a week or so ago, I decided to have Team Magma be the stealing team. It wasn't until I made that one that I realised it was the same XD

Expect 3 or more out tonight

Of course I know about Blarg XD
I'm a silent fan of everyone around here. I was thinking about putting Blarg in, but it seemed really out of place.



Figured I better put another issue in so I dont feel like I'm spamming.

EDIT: I thought I'd post all the ones I made before I go to bed. I feel like I'm making these too fast...

Enjoy!

It was the only good Fire Type I had XD
I didn't name it Charry, so it's fine

I think I'm going to have Shiny edit that last panel for me..."*FLASH*" just seemed a little bad to me. It left suspense though

Thanks for the comments