The Monster(Fanfiction) - Page 5

Great story! Can't wait for the next part.

Looking forward to it.

It just keeps getting better! I never would've thought of thieves in the city. Great job!

Nice. Can I be in it at some point?

You came in not so long after me I think. Not sure... Anyways, it (probably) wouldn't hurt to ask.

Its_my_time24

LOL I came up with that on the spot because I forgot the one I thought of before, but you can still use it because we're still in the same city, so it would be reasonable that the same clan would be there.

quote Its_my_time24

im writers blocked...not really. I just have SO MANY ideas, and dunno wut to pick :/

If you have trouble with this the best way to get your ideas down is to list them, or make an outline. you can make a timeline/cause and effect, so your story flows better. I used to do this when I wrote a long time ago, but I don't have to do it as much any more. All writers actually make an outline before they go and write the story; this is so they don't forget whats coming up, and they can get all their ideas down without having to toss any.

quote Phlogiston

Dear wildfire...
I'm sorry to say this, but you really don't have the best grammar skills. HOWEVER, the story's nice, and you have some interesting ideas.
I'd like to voice an opinion or two:
First of all, I don't think the switchaxe runs off your personal willpower or energy... that would be the, ahem, LONGSWORD. IMO the axe runs entirely off the phial, as denoted by the steam and "fire".
Second... Is there a way to indent? It would clean up the narrative a lot... ...apparently there isn't. Bummer.
Anyway, thx for reading, the story's great.

Not to spoil anything, but when I write more, there's a lot that goes into switch axes later on because they're new to the world as I have written it. and no there's no way to indent. I WOULD IF THERE WAS!!! So instead I skip a line for the next paragraph, or when someone else begins to speak.