{Strange and Lost}{Morbid Poetry by Meryl}{Please Comment}

I just wrote these, I was told they were good, but I would still like some comments on them. Thank-you.


Sinner

Through your curly hair I can see your eyes
As they stare right back into mine
You have me frozen in my place
And before I know it I can taste,
your sweet breath

You pull back and stare
You're tarring me apart
With all your lies
I should despise
But my love is too great
I can't bring myself to do it
To stop you from this sin
But she will find out
I know
The girl you say you love...

What about me?
Do you love me?
Or was it because I was the only girl
around


Feelings

I love you with all my heart
Though my friends say that isn't very smart
You are with her
But you love me
That is what I see
Your actions mean more than your words to me

But what do you feel?
What do you have bottled up inside?
That you will not share
Simpley stare
With love in your eyes
But who is in your heart?


This message was edited by MerylSnake on Dec 09 2003.

This message was edited by MerylSnake on Dec 23 2003.

This message was edited by MerylSnake on Dec 12 2004.

Those are both really good!!! Post more soon!

A new one:

Picture Perfect


You were everything I wanted
You were everything I dreamed
You were just as I imagined
Every night in my dreams

Everything was perfect
Everything was right
About You

The interests, personality,
Everything was the same
As my dream boy

Only thing I didn't picture
Was her...

Nice,very nice

*applauds*


Excellent!

Try to keep ^ the excellent work!!!

When u have more, Tell me

A new poem I just finished and spend some time on:


No Place Like Alone

My heart beating rapidly
My eyes open wide
My whole body shaking

Tears streaming down my cheeks
Silence filling my ears
Darkness surrounding me

The horror of being alone...

No one by my side
No one to hold my hand
No one to say they love me
No one to care

The horror of being alone...

You're out there somewhere
Roaming around in the darkness
Searching for me
Dreaming about me
Thinking about me

As I do the same about you
Standing here in the darkness
All alone
But I hope
Its not forever

Don't leave me alone...

Love Me Not


Love is like a curse
It will follow you around
Take up your every thought
Visit you in your dreams
It will never go away...

If you aren't loved back
What is the point of love?
It will hurt you badly


Your troubled heart
Shattered
Into a million pieces

Tear drops falling from your face
Nothing to do but run
And hide
Sit and cry your sorrows away

Love can be a joy
It can also be pain

The poem is very true! Well written too!